Wildest Temptations

Hey Temptation! My only suggestions are that, I found myself reading this story and getting confused whose point of view it was in. It felt like it was constantly jumping ...

It can't be more than 16, I'm guessing... Teehee! Wrong, since I revealed how old Dillon was in the second part, I quess I can say it here. He's 25. ...

Interesting name by the way. Thanks.. Made it up when I was thirteen, I think. Don't really remember. XD its nice! i would just wanna know their ages and personalites, ...

Wow! Total shocker here at the end! I would have never expected that. I loved the story. Wow, I'm still shocked at what just happened. The only thing I can ...

Honestly, whats a person's age got to do with anything?

I'm continuing, I already have the fourth chapter almost finished. Chapter four is interesting. haha. Kind of leads away from what I started with, but not too quickly. It is ...

Third chapter soon to be posted.

I'm really glad you liked it. I am glad that my writing has the power to keep you reading. I will write more, but for now, I kind of need ...

I posted a new chapter to the story. Here is the link:

That error was fixed. Right at the moment, I am hoping to get more of this finished, although I am flooded with homework. High School. Gotta love it.

Okay, I did edit it, and put the rest in first person, changed it from Prologue to Chapter One, and gave it a name :"Emily". The chapter name is "Emily" ...

Okay, great. I'll start from these reviews. Lots of fixing. Haha, post more later.

Okay, so I take it that this isn't the greatest story. But whatever, I can always right more. eh?? Just tell me what I can do to improve, and remember ...

I really like it, although there were some spelling errors. But other than that, It think that overall your story was very good, and it kept me hooked. Good luck, ...

Wow, I liked how you went from Nate to Pamela. More details though. Also, in the next chapter, will you explain about the clip. To me, it would seem like ...